Posts Tagged ‘head hopping’

Problems to Avoid - Part 5

Tuesday, May 18th, 2010

xby Al Kalar

Head Hopping:

You’ve seen it in the writings of even established writers. The scene is being played out from the viewpoint of one character, when suddenly you’re given the internal reaction of another character. Some writers can do this without confusing the reader, but often the reader is left hanging, wondering who’s thinking or feeling something.

“Head hopping” is the result of sloppy writing. New authors (who get rejected because of this) and established writers who have become lazy are the most frequent offenders. The established writer gets away with it because his work will sell in spite of it and his publisher knows this (but still dislikes putting the story out that way). (more…)

Garlic Breath, or What Not to Do on Your Opening Page

Tuesday, April 6th, 2010

James Scott Bell Best Selling Suspense AuthorBy James Scott Bell

The opening page of your novel is your big introduction. It’s what an agent will read with most interest, to see if you can write (which is why page 1 is often the first thing read in your proposal. You may have spent 100 hours on a killer synopsis, 50 on an irresistible query, but if the writing itself is not up to snuff, the busy agent can save time by tossing the whole thing aside without reading the rest of the proposal).

Think of it this way. You are at a party and the man or woman of your dreams is across the room. The host offers to introduce you. You walk over. There is great anticipation, even from Dreamboat, who is there to meet people, too. So Dreamboat extends a hand, you take it, and say, “Nice to meet you.”

Only you have a horrendous case of garlic breath. Dreamboat winces, whips out a phone and walks quickly away, muttering, “I have to take this.”

Well, that’s what it’s like for an agent reading your first page. He or she wants to like you, but if you’ve got garlic breath, it’s all over. Bad first impression. See you later. (more…)

Backsliding

Tuesday, July 28th, 2009

by Al Philipson

Authors who sell their first book usually do it because they have:

  1. Spent a long time learning to write compelling prose
  2. Learned their craft through practice and feedback (workshops)
  3. Finally produced a work that was both compelling and obeyed the “rules” (fast start, attention to point of view, minimum or no “info dumps”, story lines that are interesting, characterization, etc.)

After a couple of successful novels, authors begin to think they “have it made” and start to get sloppy. (more…)